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Monday, December 19, 2011

Assessment

December 19,2011
(TS) Nervously, frigidly, and unfamiliarly, I walked through the automatic sliding doors into an area unknown to me. (SD) This was how I felt on my first day at High Hopes Therapeutic Riding Center. (CM) I was pleased to meet the volunteer coordinator, Courtney Bernard, whom I had talked to over the phone, and I learned about the different people that come to High Hopes as a place to de-stress and exercise for people of all ages with disabilities such as Down syndrome and autism. (CM) On the physical aspect of my visit, I felt overly tense and nervous, but when I began walking next to the horse for side-walking, every bit of anxious stiffness danced out of me like maple leaves floating down from the trees to the ground during autumn. (CM) I learned how mount and dismount the children, and to do the arm over and ankle holds for different people with different needs, because many of them may need repositioning and support. (CM) The horses are also very old, and some of them are fatigued and have arthritis, so I am also giving the animals exercise and helping maintain their health. (SD) My emotions were scattered and mixed during my visit. (CM) For some reason, I was not as relaxed as I will be on my next visit, because today I felt new and clueless. (CM) It felt good to know that I was helping others that have special needs, and that I can do something to change their lives, or at least make them enjoyable. (CM) Meeting one of the horses was nice for me, because I didn’t know much about horses and now I have attained more knowledge about the beautiful animals. (CM) Also, I left feeling more comfortable and excited to become more involved with the staff members, horses and especially the riders the next time around. (CS) Even though the temperature was low, the expectations are high at High Hopes, and I feel prepared to take on the tasks that lie ahead for my service-learning project.

Thursday, December 15, 2011

Essay #6


Fire, Flames, “And Then It Goes Back”:
       The Connections Between Quotes from a Song and a Book
An Essay by Mia Perry
8th Grade
      December 15, 2011

Who knew that an anthem for the World Cup could be related to a house burning down? In the book To Kill A Mockingbird by Harper Lee, Miss Maudie Atkinson’s house is consumed in flames. On the other hand, there is a song by K’naan called “Wavin’ Flag” that is about overcoming and going back. There are interpretations of the connections between the quote and song that no others have ever thought about.


(TS) In the end, everything goes back to its beginning. (SD) Like in the song “Wavin’ Flag”  by K’naan, everything repeats itself, which is the same when I play basketball. (CM) At the start of a basketball game, you have an adrenaline rush and become hyperactive, which is the same in the final quarter of the game when you are determined to win, like the sports aspect of “Wavin’ Flag”. (CM)  When you lose, and even when you win, you have to go back to square one, and learn how to improve on your skills of handling and passing the basketball. (SD) Another repetition is found when the year ends and a new year begins, not many people can comprehend how life repeats itself. (CM) You start again with a clean slate, and new goals that you set for yourself, which may be the same ones that you hadn’t accomplished the previous year. (CM) Laughing and celebrating, people all over the world gather with their family and friends to celebrate the birth of a new year, but never think about how the years have patterns of repetition. (CS) Things go back as the song “Wavin’ Flag” says, and sometimes without you even realizing it.
Miss Maudie Atkinson

(TS) In addition, in To Kill A Mockingbird, there is a quote that talks about things “going back” without you realizing it; “Don’t you worry about me, Jean Louise Finch. There are ways of doing things you don’t know about”. (SD) Miss Maudie Atkinson said that gleefully to Scout after her house had burned down. (CM) This quote made me think about how Miss Maudie is forced to start over, or go back, to her beginning without a home. (CM) Also, she lost all of her memories that were in her house, and now she has to find a new place to make memories in. (SD) On the other hand, Miss Maudie losing her house has a good side to it. (CM) She clearly stated that she was pleased that her house burned down, because it was old and tired and that she would’ve burnt it down herself. (CM) She can start new adventures in her life without worrying about her old crumbling house, which means she has a copious amounts of journeys to look forward to. (CS) Things can re-occur without you even realizing, but just because you don’t realize it, doesn’t mean that other people will not recognize the repetitions.
Miss Maudie’s house burning down surprisingly reminds me of a forest fire. This situation reminds me of a forest fire, because the inhabitants of the forest must relocate and start their lives over in a new place where they can stay out of harms way. Miss Maudie also had to begin again when her home went ablaze. The quote from To Kill A Mockingbird made me think about how many different songs and situations.

      Self Assessment
1) One writing issue that I am continuing to work on is making sure that my commentaries make sense and connect to the supporting details.
2) A possible strong point in my essay is the flow of my sentences, and including FAST words.

3) One possible weak point in my writing may be that I have a few short sentences, and some longer sentences that I could even out so they are both full, long sentences.